When I see a Hershey's kiss I'm like a fat kid in a candy store. The silver foil looks like a bell right off of Santas sleigh, its a little gift straight from the elf's. Nobody can have just one. Once you taste the irresistible milk chocolate they keep calling you back for more, like a parole officer calling his convict.
~ Vinny M.
Your similes are so out of the box....love your description. Vinnie, you will have to work on your mechanics and grammar though.
ReplyDelete1. Use a comma after an introductory clause (When I see a Hershey's kiss, I'm like .... Once you taste the irresistible milk chocolate, ....)
2. Santa's sleigh (to show possession)
3. elves, not elf's (It is plural.)
4. Capitalize the first letter of all important words in a title and don't put a comma after a title (Heaven in a Foil)
5. agreement error....Once you taste the irresistible milk chocolate, it keeps calling you back for more, like a .......
I love the title! :) SBS